5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-07-26 22:46:18only a real ass would leave a story posted in this condition DELETE at once and rewrite it properly. Mature sex The first commenter was a retarded jackass so just ignore him. get a good editor and do a rewrite and NEVER EVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST«1» The first commenter was a retarded jackass so just ignore him. but only if its in a positive sense. but only if its in a positive sense. Well thought out and well developed story-line. It would be a bit better if there was the space between paragraphs because it can get a little bit confusing to the idiots who read it obviously :Danonymous readerReport 2012-03-28 09:26:21Fuck u dumb ass, apparently this is ur first time reading, see the indents on the end, in case u didn’t know thats where he took word document clicked 1.0 spaces and said remove line after paragraph dumb shitanonymous readerReport 2010-12-06 20:16:03to hard to read ever heard of a thing called PARAGRAPHS
