You need to flesh out the charectors a little, i.e. Mature sex Nonetheless, you seem to have a decent hand. Sheesh…why in the fuck are so many people obsessed with getting every character in every fucking story pregnant?!?!?anonymous readerReport 2011-09-18 03:29:31You saved me a lot of hsalse just now.SequoiaReport 2008-07-02 14:40:19Keep fucking Amber and Ashley and get them both pregnant. Nonetheless, you seem to have a decent hand. The story was very formulaic and predictable, Describing breasts as a cup size has always been a pet peave of mine. including the thunder storm? 6 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-08-13 13:33:50At the comment on 2008-07-02 at 14:40:19…how about he just fucks them and enjoys it without getting them pregnant and having 27 kids between the two of them? wow, their good! You need to flesh out the charectors a little, i.e. High school guys dont get reps for sexual prowess, except from themselves. wow, their good! In some ways you have the skills, you just need a better story.
