You can’t write we know it and so do you. Mature porn 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-04-02 21:23:12Two comments are right but far too kind. Quit wasting people’s time here you prissy little bitch. Belongs in the garbage can, this would be unacceptable as a first very rough draft much less something to be posted!!!«1» so more description and your good to go 🙂 and it is a good attempt so albeit the negative things I am assured if you work on it you can be great at this c:anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 21:42:51This yet another example of how not to write stories. It seems more like when you read fanfiction and they have extra separate chapters containing sex scenes because it doesnt have much of a build up and happens all too quickly…although it is a fantasy try to think realistically about how a child may feel and also about Andrew what they both may be feeling and input those, also try to explain what is going on in more detail, your paragraphing is
